24 comments on “I Am Part Serpent

    • I think whatever a poem means to the reader is the viable one. I think I was more aware of what I had been through in life. I am a survivor and due to the trauma bond that person is now a part of me, and could be thought of as my shadow, which I work to keep in check..

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  • Striking piece, and slightly shocking. Very beautifully executed! Just one question: what would you think of my (respectful!) suggestion that you delete the word “away” in the penultimate line? It just strikes me as unnatural and redundant, do you agree?

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    • An excellent suggestion, and I shall incorporate it in a week or two so as not to confuse things. The suggestion is one I might have stumbled upon if I had taken more time with it…but it was already Thursday.

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  • Thanks to serpents, temptations are alive and well. As I am 71 and each year seems to pass me by with greater speed, I can relate absolutely to your sentiments. But no indications of the ravages of age in your writing. Still vibrant and enjoyable.

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