DID YOU KNOW?
Please don’t think less of me, because
it happened long ago, before I
knew that serpents were inhuman.
Rest assured that I will always
keep my distance from you
and you will not be hurt by me.
DID YOU KNOW?
Please don’t think less of me, because
it happened long ago, before I
knew that serpents were inhuman.
Rest assured that I will always
keep my distance from you
and you will not be hurt by me.
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I hope I interpret this right.
The serpent metaphors of what one is being through in life or what is happening right now with change in climate. Either way, your work always keeps me to think and visuals your work in a different kind of mind set. I love it.
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I think whatever a poem means to the reader is the viable one. I think I was more aware of what I had been through in life. I am a survivor and due to the trauma bond that person is now a part of me, and could be thought of as my shadow, which I work to keep in check..
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I don’t mind snakes at all! I find them interesting.
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Well, thank you! I appreciate that.
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Thanks for telling me Nan ~
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Striking piece, and slightly shocking. Very beautifully executed! Just one question: what would you think of my (respectful!) suggestion that you delete the word “away” in the penultimate line? It just strikes me as unnatural and redundant, do you agree?
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An excellent suggestion, and I shall incorporate it in a week or two so as not to confuse things. The suggestion is one I might have stumbled upon if I had taken more time with it…but it was already Thursday.
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I happen to like serpents. Regardless what is in the bible. Come close, serpent, and twine your diamond-patterned body around me.
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Well, I didn’t know that. You may have thought I was bragging!
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I do like serpents too, and maybe I have some in me as well.
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I have come to believe a poem’s meaningfulness reflects the reader as much as the author, or moreso, and I respect that. Thanks for the response.
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A wonderful piece and endemic to the condition of trauma. As if one carries a latent, dangerous aspect that should be kept in check. I wonder though … to be rude to oneself is part of the situation. You wrote it well though.
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You got it! I’m not sure about the “to be rude to yourself” part, though. Thanks..
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Thanks to serpents, temptations are alive and well. As I am 71 and each year seems to pass me by with greater speed, I can relate absolutely to your sentiments. But no indications of the ravages of age in your writing. Still vibrant and enjoyable.
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I know what you mean. It’s easier and easier not to transgress!
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Snakes only harm us if we try to harm them… 🙂
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I wonder if that’s true of metaphorical snakes. :>l
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I think that may be true of metaphorical snakes as well, Nan. When I think of serpents, I think of dragons, not snakes. They are more mythic, I think, and play a part in my childhood too.
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I may have done what you suggest, but I was driven by an image of me clutching it in my arms to my breast, and it just wouldn’t fit! : D
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The serpent as metaphor is powerful and I believe the shadow is an ally in the long run. Good to have one such as this on your side 😉
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Thanks, I’ll accept all the help I can get!
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I am not sure that you have to be part serpent. I used to think I was a black sheep…
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Good observation.
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Thanks for reading. !
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